Maple Syrple

April 20
NaPoWriMo’s prompt: “…Notley advocates for a poet to ‘maintain a state of disobedience against … everything.’ By this she means remaining open to all forms, all subjects, and not becoming beholden to ‘usual’ methods for writing.…write a poem that involves rebellion in some way….”
This has been one. fun. morning. The first rebellious poem I remember encountering was written by Candy Paulsen Masters in my autograph book many decades ago:

Roses are Red.
Violets are purple.
Sugar is sweet
and so is maple syrple.

That’s impossible to beat, but here are two attempts:

  1.  “Car Rot in Field” to rebel against the content of “Star Light, Star Bright”. Of course.
  2.  “Itsy’s Mystification” meta to rebel against the traditional format AND content of “Itsy-Bitsy Spider”. What else?

1. “Car Rot in Field,” to rebel against the content of the traditional children’s nursery rhyme, Star Light, Star Bright” by Anonymous

Star light, star bright,
First star I see tonight,
I wish I may, I wish I might,
Have this wish I wish tonight.

Car Rot in Field, Elizabeth Boquet

Car spite, car blight
Cursed car within my sight
In my dismay, I bitch my plight:
Have a blitz hit you tonight!

2. Meta “Itsy Bitsy” is a senryū stack (or, at least, a 5-7-5 syllabic format) (No. Not “snack.” STACK! ew gross) to rebel against the traditional format and content of “Itsy-Bitsy Spider” because my Itsy lives on and is not ditzy in the slightest. 

Itsy-Bitsy Spider, Anonymous

The itsy-bitsy spider
Climbed up the water spout
Down came the rain
And washed the spider out
Out came the sun
And dried up all the rain
And the itsy-bitsy spider
Climbed up the spout again

Itsy’s Mysitification, a senryu stack, in 5,7,5 syllabic format

mystified itsy
climbs right up that water spout
every single rain

bit by bitsy bit
she rises despite downpours
welcomes the challenge

faces come what may
day after dark rainy day
lifts herself above

to find clarity
from a different point of view
make sense of it all

like the poet who
daily puts pen to paper
to find a reason

Written by Elizabeth Boquet, April 2018

10 thoughts on “Maple Syrple

  1. Looooove these, Elizabeth – that’s about how I feel when I am confronted with writing poetic forms! (My first sonnet ever was about a guppy. I loved guppies. I did not love love.)


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